At first I was hopeful.
There were skies with not limit.
I had a heart full of spirit.
The world was mine for the taking,
Places to see, and masterpieces to be making.
I had an entire life to start
And memories to fill my heart.
But doing it was going to be tough,
And I fear I’m not strong enough.
Time passes.
I see an engagement ring.
The birds begin to sing.
A bright future is shown;
I am never to be alone,
Love that is boundless,
And happiness that’s endless.
But marriage can be rough,
And I fear I’m just not good enough.
Then time ends.
Everything comes to a halt.
I realize it was all my fault.
Opportunities I ignored,
Decisions I now abhor.
Problems and mistakes I chose to forget
And in the end, it wasn’t even worth it.
Life I did rebuff, because I feared I was just never enough.
Creative Writing II/Creative Writing II Honors 
I think this was a good idea but i don’t really think that the theme is very obvious in this poem. I think that more example could have been used to should how weak this characters self esteem was. But the two that you did choose seem off because one is very open (Wanting to accomplish her goals in a way) while the other is very specific (marriage). Also how you structured the poem puts a lot of emphasis on the happy journey and not enough on the “never good enough” making the last stanza very abrupt.
Yeah, now that I look back it is pretty obvious. The two things that i described were very different but I think it was because I was trying to describe a lot of different situations in a short poem. I should have made it longer so that the events seem to fit together. I do agree with you about how it all seemed too focused on the events and not the low self esteem. I wanted the beginning to seem hopeful but I should have focused on the low self esteem later.
I liked your poem. It sounded good, but i couldn’t really tell the specific thing that it was afraid of. Was it marriage?
The element of fear was the fear of not being good enough for things (like marriage and basically everything else).
I agree with Liz here, your punctuation made the poem a little choppy. It most cases, people use very little if any punctuation, on your poem, I think you used a little too much.
Yeah, I should really work on my punctuation because that seems to be the problem with a lot of my poems.
I liked how you showed the different parts of the narrator’s life that her fear affected. It helps emphasize how profound of an effect that her fear had. The only error that stuck out was in line 2. Instead of saying “There were skies with not limit.” you should replace not with no.
Oh, I didn’t realize i had put “not.” I had meant “no.” And thanks for liking how it talked about different parts of her life.
I liked the ideas behind this poem, but the way you phrased things and broke up your lines with punctuation was really weird. It was very choppy. You SHOULD use punctuation, just not not like that. Try creating some longer phrases rather than suggestion to stop after every line by using a period. Read your poem out loud and see how it flows, and use that to create the punctuation.
I can see how it is choppy and weird. I seem to have a problem with punctuation in my poems. I guess it’s just that when i read it in my mind it does flow, but I think you’re right. I should read it out loud to make sure.